Sports Makes Your Heart So Pumped Up

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Sports Makes Your Heart So Pumped Up

My opinion is that I think sports is important because you can be fit and healthy.

Firstly,I think sports is important because you can be fit and healthy.Imagine if it was you who was a person who didn’t like sports and wasnt health and not fit.How would you feel?I will feel terrified!

Secondly,you can get your heart pounding fast,losing weight.Isn’t that what everyone want’s?

Playing the flute,Its not gonna get you fit.Why not water instead of fizzy?

Also, you can get a lot of friends,be happy,NOT alone!! You want to be skinny,have an amazing,healthy life.Not a Unhealthy,lonely life.It’s obvious,isn’t it what everyone want’s?

Next,You can stay strong,why not fruit and veggies, instead of chips and lollies.Stay healthy and strong! What do you think?

After that,you would be overjoyed,magnificent,For a fit healthy body.No point sitting down and blowing a flute,it’s not gonna help! How would you feel if this was you?Unhealthy,fat, It will be tragic and dreadful wouldn't it.A very big smile on your face will be good.

Lastly,Your feel heartbroken being fat,lazy,why not fit strong and it will make an improvement.Dancing and singing,come on you have other time to do that.Why not run,swim and jump?Doesn't everyone want that.Imagine going out to the beach in a beautiful baciney suit,With  fit and  beautiful body.Going out with a baciney suit with fat.Hold up,No don't try sucking it in.Do sports it will  help.

You can be fit with abs and not flabs with fat.

In summary,My opinion is that I think sports is way more important than music.It  will bring up joy with a fit body,it will be awful with a bad unhealthy body.